The Sepal – Short Story with Moral Lesson

Short Story with Moral Lesson: The Sepal

The Sepal - Short Story with Moral Lesson

The Sepal - Short Story with Moral Lesson

The Sepal – Short Story with Moral Lesson

The sepal couldn’t rest, how could she? She was curious as well as anxious. For the petal babe is inside her. She felt great like a “big sister”, proud to protect the little one. She knew the petal babe was florid, but tiny now, sleeping peacefully in her bosom. She felt motherly love for it. At the same time she felt honoured too, for being the haven for the petal babe. Sepal thought, “I have been guarding this lovely babe for some days and when tomorrow when it blooms in full, the world will be amazed to see the alluring and gleaming petal, they would behold that splendour with all their amazed eyes, they will feel glad about me too, because it was me who kept the petal safe for these last few days; What more I need to feel great!”. Her dream delighted her.

It was a glorious spring morning, calm and cool. When it dawned, the sepal knew, the petal will blush today, in full. She has been eagerly waiting for this day. As the petal tried to open, the sepal could feel it was being pushed down and down. The sepal was not sad, for she knew, she was the petal’s carer, who doesn’t have an existence without the petal. Though a bit sad, the sepal yielded, and finally when the flower blossomed, radiating all its beauty, the sepal was seen no more, it was down and hanging and no one would even notice it. Moreover, the sepal couldn’t even see her little one in bloom, her babe was up and she was so down. She knew she can never see the petal, and the thought made her cry. All praised the flower, for them the charm of the flower lays in the petal, none bothered about the sepal, which was not catching any one’s attention now. The sepal wished at least the petal would remember her, but it seems the petal doesn’t.

The petal was moving dilly-dally in the breeze, elated, thrilled and proud of the complimenting eyes and words. The crying sepal’s agony touched the breeze. The breeze came near her and asked why. She broke into tears and told her pain. The breeze pacified,

“Dear sepal, all are born here to perform their destined role in an acceptable way, but none are to expect anything in return. You just see the life of birds, animals and humans; they take much pains, more than you, to raise, back up and strengthen their young ones and loved ones, but when they are on their own, they forget those hands who worked for them and move away. The world also see them, not their mentors. In such a world, how can you even expect the petal or the beholders to remember you? Each one has been born for a purpose, which is to be fulfilled in an appreciable way, and you have done yours meticulously, that is enough. You were good and great at it!”.

The sepal thought for a while and found the words of the breeze right. She bore those words in her heart and was no more crying for her fate. Yes! It was a sad truth; The sepal nurtured and succored the petal with all her affection and attention, with a pure heart, still she was overlooked, and the glamorous petal was over adored.

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98 thoughts on “The Sepal – Short Story with Moral Lesson

  1. only those who observe things so carefuly can make such beautiful comparison. good moral to all of us. In todays busy world most of us dont have time to look back. dear friends, just pause, u can see so many smiling faces which helped to mould yourself.

  2. Great and different thought process! In a world where no one bothers to care about the one next, its such an appreciable work to write the relationship between sepals and petals!

  3. Interesting short story. I love how short and simple it is. I’ve never thought about the importance of a sepal until now. :) Although we do admire the petals of a flower, without the sepal, the beauty of the flower wouldn’t be able to be expressed. Well written short story. This story not only gives a moral lesson, but sort of a biology lesson as well. ;) Thank you so much for sharing this story with me!

  4. Great thought framed in a beautiful context. Never have heard story about the sepal.Very true in literally and morally.Good observation

  5. Here, (The sepal couldn’t rest, how could she?) needs to be “The sepal couldn’t rest. How could she?”

    Here (She was curious as well as anxious. For the petal babe is inside her. ) I would put as “She was curious as well as anxious, for the petal babe was inside her.”

    Here, (She felt great like a “big sister”, proud to protect the little one.) I would put “She felt great, like a big sister; proud to protect the little one.”

    Something to think about, if she feels Motherly Love for the flower baby, why does she feel like a big sister also?

    Here, (At the same time she felt honoured too, for being the haven for the petal babe.) I would put “At the same time she felt honoured for being the haven of the petal babe.” You’ve used the word “for” a bit too much so far.

    Here, (“I have been guarding this lovely babe for some days and when tomorrow when it blooms in full,) needs to be ““I have been guarding this lovely babe for some days and tomorrow when it blooms in full,”

    Here, (the world will be amazed to see the alluring and gleaming petal, they would behold that splendour with all their amazed eyes, they will feel glad about me too, because it was me who kept the petal safe for these last few days; What more I need to feel great!”. Her dream delighted her.) needs to be “the world will be amazed to see the alluring and gleaming petal. They all will behold that splendour with their amazed eyes. They will feel glad about me too, because it was me who kept the petal safe for these last few days. What more I need to feel great?”. Her dream delighted her.”

    Here, (She has been eagerly waiting for this day) needs to be “She had been eagerly waiting for this day”

    Here, (The sepal was not sad, for she knew, she was the petal’s carer, ) needs to be “The sepal was not sad, for she knew she was the petal’s carer,”

    The very next line after you say that the sepal isn’t sad, you have written “Though a bit sad, the sepal…etc” I would pick one or the other to stick with.

    Here, (the sepal was seen no more, it was down and hanging and no one would even notice it.) should be “the sepal was seen no more. It was down and hanging and no one would even notice it.”

    Here, (Moreover, the sepal couldn’t even see her little one in bloom, her babe was up and she was so down. She knew she can never see the petal, and the thought made her cry.) needs to be “Moreover, the sepal couldn’t even see her little one in bloom. Her babe was up and she was so down. She knew she could never see the petal, and the thought made her cry.”

    You keep changing the verb tense. You need to stay in the past tense. The sepal /knew/ she /could/ never see the petal. The sepal /was/ sad. The sepal /was/ proud to carry the flower babe. Think like you are telling someone a “Once upon a time” story.

    Here (All praised the flower, for them the charm of the flower lays in the petal, none bothered about the sepal, which was not catching any one’s attention now. The sepal wished at least the petal would remember her, but it seems the petal doesn’t.) Needs to be “All praised the flower. For them the charm of the flower lays in the petal. None bothered about the sepal, which was not catching anyone’s attention now. The sepal wished at least the petal would remember her, but it seemed the petal didn’t.”

    Where you say “The breeze pacified,” I would continue it just a little, saying “The Breeze pacified her, saying, “Dear sepal, …etc” and so on as the Breeze says.

    I would clean up what the Breeze says to the Sepal like this:
    ““Dear sepal, all are born here to perform their destined role in an acceptable way and none are to expect anything in return. You just look at the life of birds, animals and humans; they take much pains, more than you, to raise their young ones, but when they are on their own, they forget those hands who worked for them and move away. The world also sees them, not their mentors. In such a world, how can you expect the petal or the beholders to remember you? Each one has been born for a purpose, which is to be fulfilled in an appreciable way, and you have done yours meticulously, that is enough. You were great at it!””

    Here (She bore those words in her heart and was no more crying for her fate) needs to be “She bore those words in her heart and there was no more crying for her fate”

    Here (Yes! It was a sad truth; The sepal nurtured and succored the petal with all her affection and attention, with a pure heart, still she was overlooked, and the glamorous petal was over adored.) needs to be “Yes, it was a sad truth; The sepal nurtured and succored the petal with all her affection and attention, with a pure heart, yet still she was overlooked and the glamorous petal was over adored.”

    I don’t feel you should end here. The story feels like you should type in a “Yes this was a sad truth, BUT” and then mention whatever it was that helped the Sepal to not cry about her sad fate anymore. Maybe that crying was useless and she should just accept it, or that she had done her part well and even if no one else appreciated it, she could appreciate it.

    Another note for you would be to go through and capitalize Sepal each time you write it. The same for the Breeze. I know these are inanimate objects, but these are the characters of your story, and their ‘names’ should be capitalized. So, the Sepal, the Breeze, the Petal.

    Another thing to mention, a flower has more than one petal. You could still leave it in the singular. The story still works that way. But you could have the Sepal talk about her flower babes, children, the Petals. The Petals can be in the plural and the Sepal would stay in the singular.

    Otherwise, very interesting story, with a great point. Before reading this I hadn’t given a thought to what it would feel like for a plant, growing a long stalk and then a bud, and then when the bud blooms, what had once been the plant is ignored and everyone pays attention to the flower portion and mostly ignores the rest. Very insightful.

    • Highly grateful for your thorough analysis and suggestions….and really glad some one bothered to do even this much on such a small work…Thank u for the encouragement too :-D

  6. The concept of forgetting those who help us has been put in different ways; I liked the Petal-Sepal analogy – that has to be appreciated!

    However, I agree with Christina on the inconsistencies in tenses and other points. If you get that also right, then it’s a complete package.

  7. nice thought mridula… but do pay attention to the language…
    also stay positive in life… take positive inspiration in nature…
    remember the sepal survives even after the petals fall of…and mostly bear the seed…. that s ts greater destiny :)

  8. A fantastic inspirational story where i love this sentence the most – all are born here to perform their destined role in an acceptable way, but none are to expect anything in return. I will keep that sentence n mind 4 ever.

  9. I think it’s utterly amazing how you’ve taken to notice of such a small aspect of life. There were a few errors that I found, but nevertheless, I love how this deeply influences the readers. Wonderful. :)

  10. Mridula… It’s “your” story one hundred % ….i pictured your face, heard your voice and felt your emotions…..took me quite a few years back in life…perhaps i know or i think i know the writer too well to be an impartial judge…i c that it has already been edited and proof read….any further input would certainly go overboard… may your keyboards be carressed ever more and your systems boot forever more….

  11. Good one Mridula. I especially liked the build up to the blooming of the petal.The thoughts of the sepal about the petal was fantastic. You have used excellent metaphors, especially with respect to the breeze.

    I would share just one candid thought for your improvement. After reading the story, the protagonist, the sepal, comes across as a negative individual. It seems she is craving for attention, until the breeze tells her to carry on. I think it would have been better if the sepal herself feels proud to support the beautiful petal. What if the breeze would come and ask her, “Dear Sepal, you have supported the cute petal all your life. Now that everyone adores the petal, don’t you feel sad”, to which the sepal responds in a positive way. Just my thought. That takes nothing away from the beauty of the story.

  12. Hi,

    Good one Mridula. It’s very well thought. Loved the way you related the experience to what every human knows. Keep up the good work.. and keep posting more..

  13. Wow. This was beautiful, I’m at a loss for words… which doesn’t happen often. I feel as if I try to say something about this… it would just ruin it. It’s wonderful and nice. I really enjoyed taking a break from reading all the other things on watty and reading your short story. Wow. Bravo. Great job.

  14. yet another beautiful piece of writing. i adore your ability to handle intricate emotions in such a simple language.comparison of sepal to an elder sister is splendid.great work..keep it up.

  15. mridula
    Happy 2 read your literary venture.
    A great fact told in few words… you really have a good observation of life. Keep on writing…Best wishes

  16. This story reminds not to expect anything in return from others and only then we can find happiness & peace in what we are doing.It’s one of the truth’s in life. And you have successfully portrayed it. Please do keep writing. All the best and God bless you Mridu.

  17. Touchin story mridu….Its a way of life. So many people touch our life, we may not even remember all of them. Many not even want anything in return. Tht that doesn’t mean tht we should take everything for granted….its all the smallest things tht make the big diff.
    anyways, good work ..expectin more from u

  18. This is really nice and touching. I love everything in it that I can’t even find the right words to type! I like your topic because not so many people had thought about it.

  19. Thanks EloquentWordsmith ….but didn’t you get from where I got the idea even after reading story? :-P
    If not, it is from a flower!

  20. Beautiful, beautiful story. I just loved the way you brought that moral out into the open. I constantly tell those grieving when their loved ones leave them that their mission has been completed and now it is time for them to go home. I love your story. Thank you.

  21. Good one Mridula, got time to read this only now… Interesting observation … and nice thought process.. seems like you’ve got the attributes fit for being a writer…

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