Review of Short Story "Some Wounds Never Heal…"

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Short Story: “Some Wounds Never Heal…” by artemis_bard

Dear Writer, please find below our objective review comment based on five key elements of short stories:

Character: The main character is depicted nicely – an effective way for short story. Characterization is done along with current happenings and events of the story. It clearly shows determination and dedication of the protagonist. No extra flab was added in developing character but kept just sufficient for the theme.

Setting: Setting is poetic and vividly drawn. Poetic setting in this story could easily provide needed wings to the reader’s imagination to see the story actually happening. For example “Night fell, the moon was hidden behind the clouds, the forest now dark, shrieking with the wind. A low branch smacked him in the face, his beard shedding some snow because of it. He trudged along, there was no rhythm to his walk now.” What is interesting in this story is using setting to support character and theme. Timeframe of story is also short and single, ideal for the short story. Overall very good setting is offered in this story.

Plot: Start is powerful. It clearly arouses curiosity in reader’s mind. Story uses third person narration. It is difficult to effectively use third person narration especially when there is only one character in the story. However in this plot narration carefully limits to observation made and thus is effective. End perhaps does not meet the effectiveness offered by start and rest of the plot.

Conflict: Conflict could not be effectively created and resolved. There are few unanswered points, “who was she, why tomb was there, why ‘something’ has to be done by the hero…” Additionally in north, days and nights do not change so fast to be survived by a seventy year old. Little more information of survival tactics used would have offered a practically acceptable difficulty to the protagonist.

Theme: Although theme is mostly clear and other elements are effectively tied with it, not so obvious conflict but powerful setting can make it bit confusing.

Overall, other than conflict other elements are very effective. This style of writing could be effectively used for descriptive plot. It would be interesting to read travel experience or reminiscence for you. To improve conflict, we suggest trying very short length thrillers.

Having said the above, we strongly believe that story is an art and every art is invaluable – there is nothing good or bad as art is beyond boundaries of these adjectives. Therefore the creator is the best person to decide whether the creation meets her expectation. We like your story in total and our comments are just objective comparison with the patterns we observed in most liked short stories.

We also recommend you to read 10 Tips for short story writing by our Chief Editor at https://yourstoryclub.com/how-to-write-short-stories-tips/

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